I agree with mark, a better recording would go far to add to the allure here
I think some arrangement changes and instrumental breakdowns would really pay off as well. Your beat was solid through the entire track, removing any time to reflect on the notes and scales you were trying to deliver, ultimately destroying any chance of me using the words "moving or elegant" in my description here
Add in a little variation, retrack, and see what comes of it. Should do much better in the future if you do. Hope it helps.
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I think some arrangement changes and instrumental breakdowns would really pay off as well. Your beat was solid through the entire track, removing any time to reflect on the notes and scales you were trying to deliver, ultimately destroying any chance of me using the words "moving or elegant" in my description here
Add in a little variation, retrack, and see what comes of it. Should do much better in the future if you do. Hope it helps.